The Turned – wait a minute, what happened?

Since I’ve posted The Turned, I’ve gotten a bunch of feedback (thanks btw) and a couple of pieces of constructive criticism.  One bit of advice that I took to heart has led me to overhaul the first few chapters of the story.  So here’s the deal: Chapter One is all new.  Instead of lecturing y’all on what village life is like with the Turned around, and talking about people preparing for an attack or a fence breach, the story shows the actual breach now.  Much better understanding of why things are the way they are, and in fewer words.  And since people are doing things instead of talking about them, it is a much more powerful way for Jameson to enter the story.  Chapter Two is basically the second half of the old Chapter One, but has a handful of tweaks in it to make it stronger.  The old Chapter Two has been kicked up to Chapter Three, and so on.

So have a read, and let me know what you think of the changes.  I like them a lot.  There may be more similar changes in the future, but I don’t think I’ll be changing the number of chapters like this again.  No promises.

Kase

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